Trait Name: Brutish Type: Exclusive Origin: From being a Human from South Blue Description: +4,500 Strength & Power Doriki Levels: N/a Requirements: South Blue Human
Trait Name: Sprinter Type: Characther Origin: Characther App - Physically intense life Description: Character is well known for their running speed. This allows them to generate Speed & Agility Advantages when running/dashing. Levels: N/a
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speed based skills will always Gain an advantage,agaisnt people with equal speed
speed attribute functions one tier higher
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speed based skills will always take Gain an advantage,agaisnt people not using a speed based skill.
Requirements: Speed D
Sprinter: Character is well known for their running speed. This allows them to generate Speed & Agility Advantages when running/dashing. Trait Name: Long Sword Type: Job Trait|Skill+ Description: A swordsman technique where they cut into or through Structures and Ships well beyond the length of their weapon.The trick is in the speed of the cut. Their proficiency and how fast they execute the technique reflects directly to the length of the cut. Levels:
Lvl. 1 - Basic Proficiency: Cutting through rowboats, sheds, tree trunk, Very Small Ships.
Lvl. 2 - Skilled Proficiency: Cutting through a boulder and D-Rank Size structures.
Lvl. 3 - Technical Proficiency: Cutting through a train car, C_Rank Size structure, or Small ship. i.e. Zoro one Sea Train to Enies Lobby
Lvl. 4 - Expert Proficiency: Cutting through a galleon, B-Rank structure, or Medium Ship. i.e. Zoro cutting ship post-time skip Saboady
Lvl. 5 - Heroic Proficiency: Cutting through A-Rank Size Structures like Law cutting Fujitora's meteor or Law cutting the mountain on Punk Hazard.
Requirement: C+ Speed & Agility
Trait Name: Flying Slash Type: Job Trait|Skill+ Description: A swordsman technique where they extend the edge of their weapon over a distance to create a ranged cutting attack. Level:
Lvl. 1 - Basic Proficiency: Close Range
Lvl. 2 - Skilled Proficiency: Short Range
Lvl. 3 - Technical Proficiency: Mid Range
Lvl. 4 - Expert Proficiency: Long Range
Lvl. 5 - Heroic Proficiency: Far Range
Requirement: C+ Strength & Power and C Avg. Speed & Agility or the inverse.
Trait Name:“Shōri wa kyūsokuna sutoraiki de ochiru”or “Shokyū iru” The Basics -Disturpence Type: Job Origin: Purge family blood, rigorous training, the notebook and dedication of life [See backstory] Description: Shokyū iru is a fighting style based around the use of a singular sword and a tunage with nature. The nature tunage does have a biased towards the water and the ocean however it is a bit more complicated than this. An outside could make similarities between this style and Fishman karate/fishman jujutsu but it is indeed its own thing. Very compatible with other sword Traits and fishman Karate.
When using this style one can hear the ocean within their ears even if they are miles away from the ocean, as if seashells were being held against their eats [This does not affect their general hearing]. The bit above is just Shokyu in general, only the bit below is relivant to what this spesific trait can do.
The Basics Disturpence Branch: This is about using a single blade through Shokyū iru, to cut ones target without even Disturbing whats between. Such as a fish underwater without disturbing the oceans surface. The user must be able to acturally cut clean through something before they can cut whats behind withiout cutting without disturpance, reguardless of level.
Levels: Level 1 - Is able to strike passed Brush, leaves or the ocean surface and strike a target without disturpance. "Some Swordsman are able to Cut nothing". Level 2- Is able to strike passed a red flame, cloth or piles of human waste and strike a target without disturpance. Level 3- Is able to strike passed thicker constructs of water and target internal organs without disturpance. Level 4. Is now able to strike passed a crowd of people and strike a target without disturpance. Level 5. Strikes will pass through thick and powerful materialswithout disturbance as they strike their target. Requirements:Strength C
Post by Rigel Larrat on Jul 9, 2020 9:14:24 GMT -8
Powership: There doesn't seem to be a clear function to this trait. What does it mechanically do?
Sprinter: Please list what these vantages would be at each level.
Flying Slash: Your stats don't seem to be hitting the marks for this one. Just strike it through for now and you can apply for it later.
Also, if you like, you can describe two attributes as being at 60% Idle Rating here. Idle Rating for [Attribute Here]: 60%
I would recommend making a proficiency trait with all of these. A trait that surmises your combat style and lists the levels of proficiency. For you this would probably be sword related. You can look at other trait lockers for examples of this.
The trait and skill system can be intimidating at first. If you want help brainstorming other traits that could help your character, feel free to seek help on Discord.
Last Edit: Jul 9, 2020 9:21:40 GMT -8 by Rigel Larrat
Post by World Boss on Jul 12, 2020 22:43:14 GMT -8
Your fighting style/proficiency job trait shouldn't need Attribute reqs. that'll prevent u from being able to use it with your current statistics. Save that for other Traits.
The description of the lvls seems to just be describing the long sword Skill+ Trait. Proficiencies are raw fighting styles only influenced by style and stats, no special powers. Your level 4 description where u have the delayed cut thing would be a good start and perhaps you could build upon that and remove the structure cutting. for that ability opt for Long Sword instead.
Trait Name: Long Sword Type: Job Trait|Skill+ Description: A swordsman technique where they cut into or through Structures and Ships well beyond the length of their weapon.The trick is in the speed of the cut. Their proficiency and how fast they execute the technique reflects directly to the length of the cut. Levels:
Lvl. 1 - Basic Proficiency: Cutting through rowboats, sheds, tree trunk, Very Small Ships.
Lvl. 2 - Skilled Proficiency: Cutting through a boulder and D-Rank Size structures.
Lvl. 3 - Technical Proficiency: Cutting through a train car, C_Rank Size structure, or Small ship. i.e. Zoro one Sea Train to Enies Lobby
Lvl. 4 - Expert Proficiency: Cutting through a galleon, B-Rank structure, or Medium Ship. i.e. Zoro cutting ship post-time skip Saboady
Lvl. 5 - Heroic Proficiency: Cutting through A-Rank Size Structures like Law cutting Fujitora's meteor or Law cutting the mountain on Punk Hazard.
Requirement: C+ Speed & Agility
[b]Trait Name:[/b] Long Sword [b]Type:[/b] Job Trait|Skill+ [b]Description:[/b] A swordsman technique where they cut into or through Structures and Ships well beyond the length of their weapon.The trick is in the speed of the cut. Their proficiency and how fast they execute the technique reflects directly to the length of the cut. [b]Levels:[/b] [ul][li][b]Lvl. 1 - Basic Proficiency:[/b] Cutting through rowboats, sheds, tree trunk, Very Small Ships.[/li] [li][b]Lvl. 2 - Skilled Proficiency:[/b] Cutting through a boulder and D-Rank Size structures.[/li] [li][b]Lvl. 3 - Technical Proficiency:[/b] Cutting through a train car, C_Rank Size structure, or Small ship. i.e. Zoro one Sea Train to Enies Lobby[/li] [li][b]Lvl. 4 - Expert Proficiency:[/b] Cutting through a galleon, B-Rank structure, or Medium Ship. i.e. Zoro cutting ship post-time skip Saboady[/li] [li][b]Lvl. 5 - Heroic Proficiency:[/b] Cutting through A-Rank Size Structures like Law cutting Fujitora's meteor or Law cutting the mountain on Punk Hazard.[/li][/ul] [b]Requirement:[/b] C+ Speed & Agility
Post by Rigel Larrat on Jul 13, 2020 22:46:02 GMT -8
What I'm understanding this ability to be is a sword style that deals internal cutting injuries, striking through armor and surroundings. This is a fine fighting style, but it's different from delayed slashes, that would be another branch of abilities. Please remove that.
Also, the levels of your proficiency that you haven't earned should all be struck through. It looks fine to me now. The only problem is in the fifth level that reads "cut through anything." Anything is just too broad to be applied here, edit it to be something like, "can cut through thick and powerful materials."
Last, your app included the Sprinter trait, this is the place to put that down if you'd still like it to be a part of your character from the start.
Last Edit: Jul 13, 2020 22:48:33 GMT -8 by Rigel Larrat
Post by Rigel Larrat on Jul 16, 2020 18:52:41 GMT -8
For Sprinter, replace the term, "have priority" with "Gain an advantage," as that's more closely applicable to the mechanics of the site.
Also, since your traits got dinked so much, one of your Trait+ either Flying Slash or Long Sword, can be unlocked at Lv. 1. They'll be usable if you hit the stat requirements for them.
